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Thank you so much for your feedback! The italic parts are either for emphasis or to show Annie's inner thoughts, depending on where they are positioned. YWS' styling honestly doesn't ...

Thanks! This was a very informative comment, and I hope to get more feedback as I continue to post the story (since I am basically reposting this from my account ...

The Annie/Starlight part is actually something I should work on, yeah, but it will better - and more - explained in later chapters and it has a lot to do ...

The construction figure is literally what it says on the tin - a figure you can build. That was probably unclear. Thanks for the general advice, I will work on ...

Hm, guess the app even corrects my published texts. Wasn't expecting this, but thanks for the feedback.

Thanks for the feedback! Yeah, this is supposed to be one puzzle piece in a larger interconnected story. In a couple of days, I think I'll post another side of ...

Okay, wow, thanks. Yeah, some of the critiques you gave were also addressed at this story when I discussed it irl in a writing group, but still thanks. Never thought ...

It is nothing to apologize for. People have different tastes and it just seemed that mine wasn't right for the poem. :-)

Thanks for the criticism! Yeah, you were right - the listener is female too. It wasn't an apology...she was trying to tell her she loves her, but the message got ...

Yeah, if you have time - would you be so kind to give me a review? Thanks in advance! :-)

Oh, okay. Spoilers ! :-)

Oh. I thought she said that she had a gun in her mouth. I thought she meant that she was about to shoot herself - that wasn't the case?

The brother of my grandmother died because he was a drunk. I know some people whose lives had gone to waste because of their drinking. I perfectly understand what it ...

Don't be sorry. There are going to be some people out there that will not like your work and apparently I am one of them. Can happen.

Oh. Shame on me. Stupid mistake - shall reread those as soon as possible in order to get to know them. (Yeah, now you will think that I didn't pay ...