sharitm2

This is a very nice poem, and it flows rather well except in a few areas. "I won't let the demons lead you astray" This line doesn't quite match up ...

Hey great story (: I feel like you could have improved the first few lines though, because they didn't hook me on to the story as well as they could ...

Excellent work, it was a joy to read (: I was definitely hooked to this story from the very beginning. You're style of writing is very nice and the imagery ...

Hey, The poem was pretty good, and your word choice and rhyming were great, but the rhythm was varying throughout the poem. Also, the last line didn't fit witht he ...

Hey there, I really loved this poem and how descriptive it was. The images that you had running through my head were very clear. There's only one part that detached ...

I absolutely loved this story (: I haven't ever read anything written in the second person form that sounded so beautiful. The images of everything you were trying to communicate ...

Hi, Great poem! I absolutely love depressing poetry about love and life in general and this poem really enchanted me (: One thing was that you fell of track with ...

Hi there, What a great poem! i love the mysteriousness of it (: My favorite line is "once upon a december, memories dim as a dying ember" Excellent job with ...

I love your story!! I absolutely love the way you grabbed my attention from the very first line, and kept me hooked throughout. The only thing I think you could ...