sevynpetronella

Uhm, Wow. Thank You @Vulcanite . I'm Totally an amateur writer, and definitely don't know what I'm doing, but your review gives me encouragement, cheers x :)

Thank you! I'll take everything you said into consideration.

I wouldn't call it bad, just a bit confusing. It's usually easier to build a vivid picture of what one is reading if the verb tense is constant throughout the ...

This is a very insightful piece that depicts struggle and sorrow, and I like it, but there's a part where the tense unexpectedly changes, and that kind of changes the ...

I like the poem builds towards the end. I didn't really understand what was going on in the beginning, but I see the big picture now. Beautiful :)

Damn, This is really good. The simplicity of it really actually makes it shine as to how easy it is for you to create a good piece. Deff impressed.