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It depends on what sort of stories you like to read. Picoult focuses on the human condition and how people react to certain scenarios. Looking at my bookshelf I can ...

Sorry for the late reply! The two dialogue tags I noticed that are still unfixed from a previous review are the ones I meant. Ctrl F "relax" and you'll find ...

Buz, Well, I'm still not sold on why you want to make this a fanfiction when sometimes adding characters that aren't yours stifles your own creativity. It'll be interesting to ...

I'm actually a super Pokemon fan :) I have a plush Pikachu on my bed (which has survived since I was in 6th grade), three small sized ones on my ...

I've always felt like Bella would be the person who would resent someone altering her relationship with Edward... :3 Nope, I'm Australian! It'd be awesome to visit India one day ...

Swords, I think I will read the other chapters as it'll give me a better idea of the origins of your characters. You're in for it now :P I sort ...

Divergent, thank you for your review! I'm delighted that you enjoyed this first chapter! Unfortunately, Bella is cold as she was always so emotionless and expressionless canonically. It only made ...

RadiantShadow, thank you for your review! I'm gladdened that you enjoyed this chapter :) I can see what you mean with listing. My point wasn't to embellish on what she ...

Lorelie, thanks for your review! Brightwater's use of spells is due to an increasing terror that none of them are having an effect. She sort of lost herself in the ...

I'm glad my review helped a little and it's nice to see my suggestions taken up. Do you feel as if the story has improved a little due to those ...

You can't just "hire" an editor to fix your mistakes. Your story will never REACH that stage if you don't fix the mistakes yourself. Publishing companies read up until the ...

I really liked this, so this will remain a comment, not a review. What would have made this story a little more clever/make more sense is if Jim's job was ...

After considering my fellow reviewers reviews and my own, and breaking apart my own assumptions, I can only say: I don't know whether to hate you or be amazed at ...

The meta involved breaks my brain.