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Awesome story until it stopped unexpectedly. The one thing that tripped me up was when you (or the speaker, whateverz) said that the boy was shut up in the outhouse ...

Hey! This was a fun story to read! Below are the mistakes I stumbled on (hardly any at all! *shock horror*): -------------------- I watched my mother with the most bored ...

Crazy! Insane! *shakes head* What did I just read!?! *laughs* This was wonderfully crazy! Absolutely insane!!!! This is excellent writing. Surprisingly. Though this would be better received at - they ...

First of all, TERRIFIC! Marvelous! Outstanding! Captivating! The ending was just a dream! (of course I don't mean an actual dream, but, "Wow, that girl is a dream." sort of ...

Hey! This reminded me, strangely perhaps, of the prologues in David Eddings novels in the Belgarion series. In other words, I liked it, but some of the words did trip ...

Hey, Wow! Great story! Beginning sucked me right in! Below are the mistakes I stumbled upon: ------------------ I died ten years ago in a plane crash. Convient --------- convenient -------- ...

Hey! 1) This story is really interesting, and I definitely recommend continuing it. 2) Unlike Dreami, I don't think this is too info-dumpy at all - Peter F. Hamilton has ...

Hey! Below are my corrections - not too many seeing as starynight89 seems to have summed it all up :) ------------------------------ Stupid questions(chap1) I was at Cameron’s house getting myself ...

This was a surprisingly good story! The interaction between the "hobo" and the future Gwen was very realistic and fun to read. canislupis, is right, however on her point that ...

Hey! Nice story - I only notice a few mistakes that no-one else had pointed out. ..... I settled myself into a corner and watched --------- I think you missed ...

Hi. 1) Welcome to YWS! 2) Poems like this would be better accepted at - this is more of a VERY literate writing site. 3) Below are mistakes I picked ...

Hi there! Below are my suggestions! :) ---------------- David Cain strolled the wet, dirt en-grained ------- "ingrained" ------ streets of the Slums with a new sense of feeling. What with ...

nice story! only a few things. . . . You used the word "wee" more than what is probably acceptable in what can only be a page and a quarter ...

first: I agree with Ayra - what's the go with the spacing? *I'm going to format this into the way it should be* second - here's the mistakes I found: ...

hey first of all, this needs some SERIOUS spacing and second - here's all my corrections The man rearranged the cubelets --- not a word --- on the old cube ...