seeminglymeaningless

Hey, liked your story. It had a nice sweet ending. I really was skeptical at the start - I didn't like the way it was written, and I really wasn't ...

Hi :) First off, decent story. I've read plenty of stories that don't use grammar or correct punctuation, so kudos to you. I hope what I've written below will help ...

Switching between first and third person doesn't work. Here's an example of what it sounds like: Jenny smiled at Mat. I smiled at Mat. "How're you going, Jenny?" The boy ...

I'm actually surprised at how much we write alike. I swear to you that I wrote this two years ago, when I was 16 (it's quite obvious that this is ...

I actually read this a long time ago, but didn't critique it. ----------------- You crouch down behind bushes, behind bramble, behind undergrowth (was I behind anything else? Perhaps leaves, twigs ...

*pulls face* You should edit this =p Before someone attacks you for being sloppy. I mean, you've had so many helpful reviews so far, and you haven't yet taken the ...

What? *confused* Eh? What did I just read? =( This wasn't bad. . . it just had no climax at all. The writing in itself was okay, maybe even perfect, ...

Dude, is it alright if I stalk you? Because I'm seriously contemplating it if all your works are as good as this one and Corporate. Off to go check out ...

Hey Playerj09 Sorry for the harsh review before - I guess I was a tad angry at seeing such unedited mess littered in the forum I was exploring. Thank you ...

Fantastic!! Absolutely wonderful! I was a bit daunted by the length at first, but the way you write is just so entertaining, that it didn't take long for me to ...

Neat. Liked it much better than "How you broke my heart" which I just couldn't. . . gah. Anyway - this was a fantastic idea (funny how you came to ...

Fantastic! I wasn't suspecting that ending *at all*! If the ending had been a person, I would have committed a double-take. Chocoholic seems to think it was cliched, but I ...

JosephDean has provided you with some excellent advice, and I don't think he's missed anything at all. I thought the descriptions throughout this were excellent, and this was a pleasure ...

So you've reviewed someone's work once, and posted 12 times yourself - and you joined just today. Here at YWS, we have this little policy, "One review to every two ...

Besides the fact that it was obvious that the main character was a vampire, that a beautiful girl is alone in a building that is all but falling apart, that ...