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Hey Riven :) First, the boring stuff: The sun was just beginning to set as I was walking home. I looked around and enjoyed myself as much as I could ...

Hey :) First of all, you should probably rate this as R, as we don't want any 12 year olds reading this and having nightmares. Second, here's my sentence by ...

Wow, Elinor tore you a new one :s I, however, enjoyed your story. I'm not a horse story person myself, having had to endure countless poems about them on deviantArt, ...

Prologue: In the times that followed the Purges, all Mages lived in fear. They spent their lives in hiding, rarely did groups meet, and when they did an awkward understanding ...

Wait wait wait wait. You're thirteen years old?! Are you kidding me?! Kid, the quality of this story is beyond that of someone five years older than you! I was ...

Firstly, this post is WAY too long. Cut it down to at most a third. People don't want to be bogged down in a person's story for longer than 10 ...

Hi :) You critiqued my work, so here I am returning the favour. I tend to critique while reading, so I don't forget anything and tell you my on going ...

Hi :) Awesome idea. It reminded me of the Golden Compass, Narnia and the Secret Garden, mixed with a sort of Harry Potter-kids-being-sorted kind of thing, what with the portal, ...

I'm so sorry. It's just so long! I tried to read the majority of it - but only got up to the part where you are describing the bookshelf in ...

Hi I looked at this once before, and couldn't make myself read it. Perhaps it is just not something I would normally read. However, as no one else has critiqued ...

Hey, Firstly. . . Loved the idea! But hell! I was disappointed by the ending! So many threads left untied, so many questions left unanswered! What was the note?! Who ...

Hey :) Kylan was a bit cruel. While I do agree with him that the story is confusing and upon reaching the end I felt as if I hadn't actually ...

Blink pretty much covered everything, but here are the corrections if you had bothered to take his advice, showing you what would have been fixed, and how it'd look. I ...

I could find hardly anything wrong with this. I disliked the beginning - it didn't seem necessary, in fact, it was quite confusing :P But the following - loved it. ...

Firstly - I want to read more. Second, below are my thoughts. ------------ Crash after crash; swooping in to take its prey of sand out to sea **(this sentence confused ...