sday1607

I sounds a little like Martin Luther King's 'I have a dream' speech, but not in a bad way. A more, developed, structured way. I like the line breaks and ...

Short but sweet. I like. :P I love the use of semi-colons in the first stanza, it really helps the rhythm to speed up, and then stop abruptly with the ...

I have absolutely no idea what its about, but completely disagree with the last comment. I think the line breaks are imperative to the suspense and dragging the reader in, ...

I loved it, the imagery was amazing. I also loved how, although the rhyme scheme altered throughout the poem, it somehow managed to fit and added an air of abstractness. ...

Good concept, the rhyme and structure seems very forced. I'd try a poem without worrying about rhyme/structure and just let the creative juices flow. It seems that you've got a ...

This is my style of writing, and its pretty damn good. Again, formatting it into stanzas and enjambements would give it structure and improve it. The beginning of every line ...

Really, very, very good. Only critique would be the change in rhythm at the ends of stanzas 2 and 3. It slows it down and means that the crescendo of ...