I loved it, the imagery was amazing.
I also loved how, although the rhyme scheme altered throughout the poem, it somehow managed to fit and added an air of abstractness.
My favourite part was the opening stanza, awash with powerful imagery and personification.
The late birds call the breathless moon,
and through the trees watch embers fly
The wild wind sings its restless tune,
and glowing, fervent hearts and eyes
paint the sky with stars.
Putting 'Paint the sky with stars' as a single line emphasises its importance and acts as a talisman for the rest of the poem, and upon a second reading, it is spot on.
The rhyme seems natural and unforced - always a winner.
Keep it up!
Points: 890
Reviews: 21
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