sargsauce

Typos. Stupid mobile device and its autocorrect (autoco-wrecks)

No, no. Don't do that. You can't delete a post after someone else has commented on it for reasons of decency and trackability. Just ask someone with a differently colored ...

I apologize, I can often come across as harsh-sounding, but really I'm just being blunt. Do allow me one more blunt comment because [blunt] just because a story is true ...

Defensive much? Relax. I'm not insulting you, but you seem to be insulting me. Don't post your works to a public literary forum for critiques if you're going to lash ...

I took way too long to write that -_-

I don't usually like to bump stories to reply to other comments and such, but I thought it was important enough to say. I understand there is humor, which is ...

First off, thanks for reading and the very thoughtful review. It makes me feel special. Second, you are an extremely astute reader. Good job! I'll respond line by line here, ...

Thanks, folks, for the input and for reading. It was a total departure from my usual style to mimic an author I've been reading of late who writes lighthearted chapter-long ...

Navita: noted. As way of explanation, I'll say a couple things. In the first draft, the italicized portions had no punctuation at all. It was a headlong trip further and ...

Thanks for reading and taking the time to comment! However, I hate to break it to you, but "parts" means a different thing in music than it does usually. In ...

Don't get me wrong; when I said it was "rough" I meant it as a good thing. A guy sitting alone at a bar knocking back drinks and hating himself ...

There exists the tricky issue of going back and editing and adding more content. It's easy to repeat ideas or use too many words. Comments in red. ...The oncoming car ...

Of course, of course. I'll post some thoughts here. If you'd like to take it further, I suggest we take it to private messages so we don't keep bumping this ...

Smaur: Thanks a mucho for the review. Again, you've hit the nail on the head. And again, I find myself wrestling with 1) What's appropriate in a literary context and ...

Well, it's true, you're trying to stay true to the source material. Though, just a thought, and I realize that you won't do it at this point, but 1) you ...