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  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Day They Would Never Forget: Chapter Five

    Hello Michael! Another awesome chapter! :) This was very well-written, and I'm excited to see where the story will go from here. Here are just some nit-picks I had while ...

    Aug 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: The Office

    The content of this poem was great, and there were no puncuation errors as far as I could see. However, I agree with Noelle, the breaks in the middle of ...

    Aug 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Deathbed

    The effort you put into this poem totally paid off! It was beautiful, and the rhyming enhanced the poem instead of dragging it down. I envy your rhyming skills! :) ...

    Aug 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: We the Fallen

    Your poem was very well written. Before writing this review, I actually paused to think about those who died fighting for our country. This proves that your poem has an ...

    Aug 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Our Every Tear

    This poem shows what poetry is all about...turning something sad into something beautiful. Nice work. :) The only nitpick I have is this: On the front is her birthday Is ...

    Aug 13, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Empty Spaces

    I must say I prefered the first version of your poem. I think the rhyming the second version diluted the tone and made it harder to understand. In general, the ...

    Aug 13, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Love is Rich-Chapter 2

    Hi, I'm Sarah and I'll be reviewing your work today! I liked the general idea of this chapter a lot. However, it seemed a little rushed to me. If you ...

    Aug 12, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Hell's Rollercoaster

    Nice! This poem had great rhyme and imagery, and displayed immense imagination! I have no critic for this. This poem's pace was just like a thrill ride, and made me ...

    Aug 9, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Day They Would Never Forget: Chapter Four

    Hi Michael! Again, nice job! I really liked the emotion in this chapter, it drew me in. The dream was fantastic, I could imagine it all in my head like ...

    Jul 30, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Day They Would Never Forget: Chapter Three

    Hey Michael! Another amazing chapter! The only real problem I had with this was the change in narration. You might want to add something at the begining of the chapter ...

    Jul 26, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Dead End

    Wow, this poem gave me chills! The tone was very dark and despairing, and you're rich choice of words emphasized this. I liked the ending as well; it was like ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Apocalypse

    This is a really interesting perspective. :) However, as another reviewer already said, this should be a little more suspensful and exciting. When the girl confronted the zombie in the ...

    Jul 20, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Historical Fiction, General Re: A Day They Would Never Forget: Chapter One

    Hey Michael!!! Sorry it's taken me so long to review this! I couldn't find your story for awhile (I've been on this site for three weeks and I still can't ...

    May 21, 2011
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Anymore

    Hey!!! I liked this a lot! You must have done a good job of balancing the mood in this song, because even though the subject matter was sad, it didn't ...

    May 19, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Ode To Zombies [contest entry]

    LOVED this poem!!! The subject matter was very different, which I appreciated. Also, your title was hooked me in as soon as I read it! (: Amazing job! P.S.--The twist ...

    May 17, 2011


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