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Did/Does Brad have a crush on Jack?

I'm hurt. You couldn't include me :(. But in all seriousness, its awesome.

Don't you speak English in Ireland, as like, the national language? Hasn't Irish not been the national language of the Emerald Isle since the British Invaded anc colonized?

I have a fever and the only prescription is more cowbell.

I revised it. Heres the new one: LET MY PEOPLE STAY There is a place on the Mediteranean where I learned to walk, run and ride where I experienced love, ...

I have to agree with Chevy and Bubblewrapped. The rhyming takes away from the power of the poem. Remember--poems don't have to rhyme to be powerful.

While I don't agree with the political connotations of the peice, it is very expressive and well done. GOOD JOB!

My only critique is that the spanish really doesn't translate what you are saying in the English. I hope that you weren't trying to translate with la espanol, porque no ...

This was very disturbing....I'm hoping thats what you were aiming for. However, it would be even more powerful in poem format.

I liked it. But I knew from the very begginning that there was going to be some kind of twist. Heh. Anyway, the only critique I can think of is ...

Done.

Well, its meant to be more of a reflective thing, not a narrative of that aspect of his life. Besides, in the camps, you can't get revenge against teh nazis. ...

Why DID you write this, Qi? Most of the lines sound like they could have come straight out of Gunnery Sergeant Hartman's (see: Full Metal Jacket), or any other DI ...

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I think its really good, and I can't really think of any critiques for this. I'll leave that up to others.