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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Hallelujah

    i am so so so glad you revised it, it seems so less cluttered now. you're imagery is great, and over-all you did well in keeping it Christian-y, or whatever ...

    Apr 24, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Mellow.

    poems like this are good. i think anything that's written has a purpose for some reason, same goes for this. it is a cute little piece. famous authors write stuff ...

    Apr 13, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The first born: Chapter 1 (major changes underway)

    ah! oh my goodness gracious! i LOVE this. fantastic! yes, i think he very much acts like it, though maybe you could add something about Rumpelstilskin's explanation for him living ...

    Mar 31, 2008
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: The First Born: Prologue (edited)

    i love remakes of classic fairy tales like this! im not much of a critiquer, but i noticed a few things. first, i've recently read and been told (after i ...

    Mar 22, 2008
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: All Eyes On Us [Edited on 3/18/08]

    i only didnt understand this sentence: Ha, it seems to be saying. He’ll sit next to me, but he’ll never next to you. (im an idiot and dont know how ...

    Mar 12, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: snow

    the way you describe the snowfall is wonderful- there's just no form to it. i dont mind no punctuation, but capital letters at the start of each new line would ...

    Mar 12, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: City Streets

    your descriptions are really well written, and since i don't mind free-verse i actually liked the way this flows without rhyming. i love reading poems with good imagery and diction, ...

    Mar 12, 2008


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