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Ha wow what a change in direction. I find your character kinda crude, but I suppose all men think like that. And you know what I really liked your character, ...

I feel rushed, the whole thing just seemed extremly rushed. I like the idea behind the dream lovers, wouldn't it be nice to dream of the person your supposed to ...

Okayyyy, first I feel like I have to praise you. This is a very good story, it's original and i think if you work on it, it'll be a good ...

Really amazing!!! Great foundation for a great story. I'm just curious how old the twins are, they seem kinda young? But I'll keep reading in a bit! Really good!!!! Your ...

I thought it was beautiful. The way you discribed the girl, wasn't over done, it was just right. The way you started your story was brilliant, I thought. It was ...

So, heres what I thought. It was good, needs a lot of work but don't start editing yet until you got a good foundation. There was a lot, jumping, set ...

Dont edit it until your done =) Otherwise everything was great, your characters are strong, distinct. Which is good. It got a little confusing, a little, dull at times but ...

So, I've just spent two and a half hours straight on reading your novel and if you posted more I'd read more. This story is brilliant, your writing is brilliant, ...

Hey! Okay first and most importantly, stop worrying about the grammer, write with your heart first then your head. Or else you'll go crazy and you'll never finish what you ...

That was nice, I can connect with you there. Actually I think everyone who has been bullied or felt alone in their life can relate with this work. I used ...

That was amazing. I couldnt stop ready everything was laid out very well. Why havent you written more? It was soo darn good. I think you should talk a wee ...

I love the brotherly relationship! Haha! Okay what can i say about this chapter. I liked it a lot better then the first one. It was more interesting, more action, ...

I really liked it, your very descriptive your dialouge is A+. Overall i give it a 9/10. I didn't give it all ten points because even though it was remakably ...

Reread it outloud Some parts go by so quickly, like for example I was reading and jumped a paragraph and Nina is in labour? Wow slow down a wee bit, ...

Woo Michelle is going to hook up with Derrick! YES! I knew it! Okay, again a little to much dialouge for my taste but everything was good. You are such ...