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Cute, I actually love cupcakes, like... LOVE CUPCAKES. This poem makes me want to go make vanilla cupcakes and mope around all night and get fat. I mean, I love ...

I found it really choppy, and i feel like you need to be clearer, like one minute Amber was talking and the next it was Becca and then for a ...

I think it was good, needs a little work but it was good. I think you talked a little to much about how silent the city was, it got to ...

Very sexy story, a lot of unanswered questions though. I think you should make it longer, or even make it into a novel. I dont think they should have told ...

aw this story hurt my scottish feelings! You know, I thought it was the other way around, the english were always hurting the scottish, but every story has two sides. ...

Overall I think this chapter was OK. It's a little, confusing at times. The character names are so hard to remember and sound so a like sometimes i have to ...

I hate Jesse,I don't know him, but I don't like him. He sounds like controling, and that makes me nervous for Lilah. I hope Lucas punching him to the moon! ...

Okay, Firstly I am not going to put you down and make you feel crappy about your work. Your young and I wasn't even writing at thirteen so don't give ...

Okay so it sounds like your MC is irish yet, the soilder sounds irish aswell. Huh. Anyways I really liked it, I am a catholic and my family comes from ...

Amazing. This story is so real and the foundation is so strong, It can go anywere. I can't believe Luke is all grown up and I know he's still in ...

Howdy It looks like it has a lot of promise, it looks like a rather good foundation. I am a little confused though, like who the characters are so I ...

Okay firstly, your writing is really good, I didn't really have any problems with the way you write. But as a mother myself I would just like to correct a ...

I really liked the ending. Lilah's true feelings are out, you get a sense of the bitter feelings that were left behind from Luke. I think when you wrote 'I ...

Loved it! Well, i don't really know what it's about yet but ether way I loved it. Your writing is great, it's interesting, I didn't find any boring parts. It ...

It was a little hard to read but I really enjoyed it. I want to know more, I want to know more about the characters, about the other world, about ...