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Re: Phoenix, ch. 1
i hope this doesn't seem to critical but it was too short for a first chapter and you need to take time to describe the characters and surroundings
Oct 28, 2007 -
Re: In The Midst of Chaos- Prologue
good prologue you were able to catch the readers attention from the start till the end however when you post your story up here use a different text style too ...
Oct 26, 2007 -
Re: So Much for Magicians
very clearly set out which makes it easier to read very detailed descriptions if you stay with it then it could turn out to be an excellent story
Oct 24, 2007