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Hi! I don't usually crit novels, but I've got experience writing them so I'll try to help you with this first chapter. First off, the spelling and grammar errors are ...

Oh my god this is a masterpiece no seriously I really, really like this. You're right to be proud because it's hilarious. I've seen published novels that were ten times ...

"We are on the scene for at least one hour" "My first week on the job, I didn’t do anything. I simply sat in a ugly blue chair, in a ...

What do I think how do I feel; I hope to catch a wink Or a smile on the photo reel. You look at me and I am confused: not ...

Cool poem. I like the message a lot :D Last line: "You can too" A Small Person May Have Have A Big Voice People Say You Have Noting Else In ...

Brilliant. I really relate to this. It seems so breezy but my entry is terrible so I'm one to talk, yeah right. Anyway, the point of the contest was not ...

I LOVE THIS STORY I LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS STORY I LOVE BASKETBALL I LOVE THE WNBA I LOVE THE WAY THIS STORY ENDS okay that's just sounding weird but ...

I didn't read the other chapters. I'm trying to get my review total up, I won't lie. This is clearly a rough draft due to the grammar, but I like ...

I think this resonates with a lot of people who read the books. I also didn't like the movies that much. The third was my favorite movie, but it was ...

I like this. I normally can't deal with women protagonists in historical fiction because I keep imagining elbowing everyone in the ****ing jaw if I lived back then and saying ...

I like this poem. Few lines, but you get the feeling that each word was carefully chosen, which is also evocative of the spirit of Ramadan, right? Have you thought ...

I disagree that the poem is in any way arrogant. There are examples of perseverance of course, but sometimes you don't relate to anyone at all. Sometimes it feels like ...

I love this story! However, here are some tips: I chucked and sat down in the rocking chair beside her bed. You meant "chuckled" Also, easy on the adverbs. You ...

Wow, this is short. Use the words you have left to beef it up. Cautiously, Nate peered around a rouge colored wall [rouge is makeup, not a color. You don't ...

Already to familiar, so she might as well sign it and seal it up. She could already see the surprise in Margot’s honeyed eyes. Too familiar. This story is great! ...