Published August 16, 2011
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Wow this was good. I am a small person myself and this helps lift me out of my random depression. Though I noticed a few mistakes the poem was very good and inspiring. Keep it up!
Hey Youwish,
First off one error:
Your poem has a lack of punctuation, which is very important!
Like her for example :
See it sounds like YOU have something inside ME. You have to use punctuation!
I won't go through it all, I think you get the point punctuation is extremely important. In anything. I do like what you are trying to say in the poem, and you got your point through. Good Job!
PM me or post on my wall!
-Boo
I love this poem it was great.I can't believe you wrote this. I am so proud I just love it. There was some spelling mistakes like
and But It was all great in the end. Keep up the good work I really love your writing you are getting better each time you write something just keep it up.Cool poem. I like the message a lot
Last line:
"You can too"
Delete one of the have's, and fix Nothing.
I also think punctuation would help the work. Like
"Give Up?
No!"
Keep writing,
Hi there!
This is a very good peom. I like the way you break up each line. It's very original and I've never seen a poem written like that. Your spelling and grammer is good except for two things that I listed below.
It should be you're.
Shouldn't this be 'something'? Maybe I'm just messing up your structure.
Again, great job. This has a good message and I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing!
I really love this!! Great imagery!!!!