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it sort of reminded me of life how one can go insane and die to leave the deceased with eternal dreams of their own fantasys its unorganized but shows emphasis ...

That was the most beautiful ending to anything ive ever heard great metaphors for the answers to the simple questions that the blind boy asks it leaves us thinking that ...

very dark very disturbing very unnattural very good the fact of the party the night before adds a great touch towards reality im just begging for part two keep posting

in my honest opinion ive never liked how sonnets flowed but this is a good exception good use of old poetry flows greatly to make the overpowering emotion of self ...

I like the fact of the "errors" of the grammar were they intentional? sometimes we have to rebel against what the english language to get our points across Dont change ...

very good poem about childhood memory kinda choppy like the guy before me but i do it alot to keep posting

put some more emotion to it you have the ability to write work it! best regards