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Nicely done! I like your descriptions here! They have a certain...grace to them, if that makes sense. :) I'm very interested to see where you're going with this story, so ...

Haha, thanks! :) Yes, that would be so helpful in "real life". =D

I liked the story you told here, but I feel like the timing and rhyming was a bit off. Who knows? Maybe I was reading it wrong. Overall, I think ...

Thanks so much for all of your helpful comments! I'll definitely put them to use! Since this is just a first rough draft, I'm planning on definitely reviewing it later ...

I liked it! I'm trying to figure out how long it took you to write this because I can see the effort you put into it. Good job on the ...

I really like this poem! I think you did a really good job on it. The only thing that I have a problem with is the rhythm and timing seems ...

Excellent posting! I really liked the visual that you gave me, as well as your chosen words. I really enjoyed reading this! Keep 'em coming! :)