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Hello again. :] You are correct about 'latter' and 'duration'. Thanks for catching that! That quote, out of context, is not much of a consolidation. xD It's a reference to ...

Actually, you did read this first part of Chapter 6 a few years ago. ^_^ But I wouldn't expect you to remember from that long ago. xD And I would ...

Woot, last reply! Thanks again for taking the time to making these lengthy replies to my replies. Nice to know you're at least thinking about what my feedback is. Since, ...

Lol. "Ahoy" again. xD To do the quote/boxes, you use [*quote]Insert quoted thing here[*/quote] without the asterisks. "More screams" has an ambiguous meaning. It could mean the screams came from ...

Hey, you tagged me just at the right time! :D Just submitted my last assignment for school this semester. Woot! But figured I'd respond to these replies first. :] Well, ...

Is there a reason you copied and pasted @Nikayla 's review from below?

My bad. I might be using the wrong word, but it's basically a similar principal to the papers you write in school. Where each paragraph has a main idea and ...

So, from what I've read of this, most of the things you're telling me are pure stylistic choice rather than an actual reason for them not working. So I won't ...

As mentioned below: brows narrowing is the same as furrowing and flexing mean they rise. I'm glad this sounded historically authentic. It may not be as fun to read, but ...

'Brows narrowed' is the same thing as furrowing. And you have muscles in your brows, so they can flex. When your brow muscles flex, it moves them up. And this ...

Thank you for your kinds words. I've happy to hear the chapter title was encouraging. I'll definitely have to work on making sure the remaining chapters are up to par. ...

LMAO. Well, thank you for choosing my story for one of your last reviews. And being such a sweetie about it too. I'm usually a monster when I review while ...

Thank you for the compliments and I'm glad the social-outcast angle worked. ^_^ I agree, that's a very odd sentence. That's one of the newer sentences (this has gone through ...

Wow, I'm so honored to hear that it sounds authentic. No, it's completely fiction. I'm happy to hear Shane is dimensional. He's definitely gone through some work. ^_^ Haha, well, ...

In terms of nitpicks: 1.) I did the 'bluntly obvious' thing to show Kamber's overkill of her believes and ignorance. But, I can try omitting it and see how that ...