rawrafied

Nice starter sentence. Short, simple, sweet, and prompts questioning by the reader. :3 Interesting idea of how to incorporate 'the Midas touch' with her ability. Nice word 'clandestine', but you ...

Loved the text messages and appropriate language. I love how the smilies/emoticons you choice (or choose not to use) correlated with their genders. Oh, an interesting topic about talking to ...

'Warn him'? Gaspid. Who? Aye~~~! He's not a mistress killer! But, boo, he's got a mistress. (The scoundrel). D: But, yay! He turned her down. :D Wait, she turned him ...

Found it interesting that the mother insulted the sweater that she bought for her daughter. Loved 'I don't know what...look good today.' 'I blurt out "3!"...I might add- 25' I ...

As I mentioned in the 'review the person above' thread, poetry isn't my forte. I'm familiar with writing 'poetically' but not stanza format. If I'm not mistaken, grammar rules are ...

Loved the wording 'while mom played friendly minimum-wage waitress down the block'. Wow, his mom was pretty shocked for just Mortrin. O.o Though I guess it makes since if Shawn's ...

Loved the effort you made in to your research to the point of making the dialogue historical friendly, such as with the slur "lobster-back" and "Fat King George" reference. Also, ...

Loved: 'Why this bothered...was very vexing.' Lol'd at "I beg your pardon!" "Your are pardoned." Loved the hypocrisy of '...not found the right husband. Not that they were even looking' ...

I liked how you styled your writing as a mix of formal descriptions with informal, first-person speech. I liked how you threw us in the middle of an impending war ...