rainiswet

I think that your poem might flow better if punctuation was changed- e.g.-Summer danced ; the sun beamed down On the grassy plain . Along the stream she went With ...

The abstract imagery is really really cliche. In the first stanza I liked the finality of: My fear, my anger. My fault. , but I think that the poem should ...

I like the gist of the poem, and have written many poems of a similar nature on the borders of my math homework, however, I find the stanza They whine ...