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Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose: Ch. IV: The Town in No Mans Land 1
Hello again! I'm afraid I don't have much grammar input for this chapter; you've done a great job! Here's the few things I picked up: For ages he saw a ...
Mar 23, 2021 -
Re: The value of community service
heya! I just want to leave a quick suggestion. I don't know if the prompt was just "the value of community service" or "what is the value of community service ...
Mar 19, 2021 -
Re: Love never last long
Hi Shamiaya! Welcome to YWS! Your poem takes a neat twist on "Love"; instead of showing us how love feels, for the most part you give advice on how to ...
Mar 18, 2021 -
Re: the day you came part 1
Hello Pokeberry! (I love your avatar btw) The first thing I usually do when I decide to review a novel/chapter is check how long it is, and wow... you have ...
Mar 17, 2021 -
Re: Goodbye
Wow. I've been following your poetry because it's very vivid and beautifully written, but this work stands out to me so much for its content and its heartfelt feeling. In ...
Mar 14, 2021 -
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose: Ch.III: Claire 5
Hi Mailice! (sorry this review was long in coming--school's kept me busy ;)) And the next morning a monstrous spectacle awaited the world - she got up early. Oh, the ...
Mar 11, 2021 -
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose - Ch.III: Claire 2
I love your beginning, it’s a very simple yet inviting, and I would even say poetic :D It fitted wonderful ly into the house. Wonderful is modifying “fitted”(verb), so it ...
Mar 6, 2021 -
Re: feathers
Hi Yoshikrab! I'm mostly here for your theme(I want to get it right this time!) but there is just one thing that bothers me: they're just as pretty as bright ...
Mar 3, 2021 -
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose - Ch.III: Claire 1
Hi Mailice! "How does he want to come? And why? It's not just because of you, is it?" "How" is kind of a weird question to ask, because to me ...
Feb 24, 2021 -
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose - Ch.II: The Intruder 3
Hello! I'm back at it with grammar suggestions! :) They were possibly looking for the two, but they made it to bridge undetected. If they perceived horse whinnies, Martha spoke ...
Feb 19, 2021 -
Re: lovelines
Hi Lavvie! I'm here to repay the gift of a review :) two glimmer: iridescence cocooning between a pooling oasis on cumulus sheets There’s so many lovely words!! I took ...
Feb 17, 2021 -
Re: seashells
Hi Yoshikrab! I love sonnets, and can't wait to dive into this one! My favorite line is by far your fourth: our tears leak from our fingers to the floor ...
Feb 17, 2021 -
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose - Ch.II: The Intruder 2
Hi Mailice! This time I'll forego focusing on grammar, because for the most part you have it all under control. Here's a couple of general impressions I got on my ...
Feb 14, 2021 -
Re: Thought Patterns
I'm really impressed by your story! My first read through was a little confusing, mostly because I wasn't sure who was thinking what, but I was really surprised by the ...
Feb 13, 2021 -
Re: Longing of a Maiden Rose - Ch.II: The Intruder 1
Hi Mailice! I'm back again for another review! The footpaths were a natural estate for Regenschloss. I'm not sure you used "estate" in the right context here. It seems right, ...
Feb 12, 2021
