punkrockchick

Get the end edited again. The story's good but you're grammar isn't :? P.S: Thanks for mentioning I was the one who helped... :evil:

Wow, this is amazing! It's beautiful in an incredibly sad way. It's a kind of contradiction, I think. Since in the beginning, they're both so naive and innocent and full ...

This is really good; there's nothing you can really say wrong with it. I love all the acting, and just the way you phrased everything - you can really imagine ...