prolixity

I read the first sentence and almost didn't keep going. And then I did. "Oh." An interesting choice, this "obtuse diction." I don't know if this is your normal writing ...

I just had to read this because of the title. How appropriate! Basically, you had a lot of grammar issues that I personally found distracting. I corrected some of them, ...

Hi there! This was pretty good! Nitpicks We're two completely different people. This didn’t seem like a very strong opening argument or whatever. Because people generally are completely different…

Hi there! You reviewed one of my stories and I wanted to return the favor. Nitpicks Or so it would seem seemed . What a scream! I feel like this ...

Hi there! I liked this. :) Nitpicks The head of a young boy grew from the garbage pile and leaned over, cheek on the surface, like a wilted flower. Excellent ...

Hello. This was really interesting! Nitpicks I have never spoken to anyone outside the two other Grimms since that day. the place where so many souls ; , both innocent ...

Hold on. This was the first story you wrote in English? Seriously? This is just... wow. Nitpicks: It tinkled the whole time , while he carried it in the subway, ...

Hi there! Nitpicks: gliding her fingers smoothly over the moist of her skin. How about “over her moist skin” or “over the moistness of her skin”? Also, adverbs aren’t the ...

Hi! Ms. Tibbs had to remind us of the importance the end of years exams will be to our final marks. Woah, awkward sentence. I might say something like: “Ms. ...

Hi! Nitpicks: Hello, it's me again. Who else would it be? :) never to be seen again , let's hope. Alice keeps calling for lunch which I refuse. So you ...

Have you read William Carlos Williams' poem, "The Red Wheelbarrow?" That's what this reminds me of. I wouldn't be surprised if you had read it, and this is inspired by ...

Hey! This was so fun to read. Here are some nitpicks first: My dad , after a long battle with my mum It’s “Dad and Mum” or “my dad and ...

Hi there! This is pretty short, but it definitely has potential. At this stage, I wouldn't really call it a short story, since there doesn't seem to be a plot. ...

Hello! This was a really interesting read. Let me start with some nitpicks: As rain pelted on the uneven pavement , I joged jogged rather awkwardly in pursuit of the ...

Hi! This is my first review, so I hope it's okay... I liked this. You have good descriptive skills. I was getting a little grossed out by the homeless guy, ...