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Ugh, don't listen to these people who say it's too long and draggy. Obviously they haven't read any substantial literature. Anyways, this makes perfect sense to me. As a writer, ...

First off I really like this. I thought your tone to be melancholy and dreary which I loved! Near her head is a wild violet, straining in the throes of ...

Ahhhh I love this! Anyways, I just have a few things: I don't like how you mentioned the parents' names since they were so irrelevant to the story. "Yeah, why?" ...

It was quite a rush to see him waking up so she lit up another cigar and started smoking; after all, it was the only way in which she could ...

It was good, but predictable. I loved your details and your emotion, but I knew what was going to happen. To make it more alluring you can add a twist, ...

Yeah, so I almost cried while reading this. Only thing that I have are: “You looked beautiful with your grey sweats and yellow tee-shirt, bright blue rain coat atop with ...

This was good, I liked it. You mind is very creative. Just be careful when you are writing in a stream of consciousness. Why don’t you just add ‘No Summer’ ...

Wow, I really like your diction here. The way you use your words, its great! She could run now, try to escape. Of course, with over humanly strength, she could ...

Good start, definitely worth continuing. It was a warm spring day. I was wearing a light blue t-shirt and gray short shorts. My wavy dark brown hair was pulled into ...

The setting and current situation sounds a bit like the Holocaust. However, it was really interesting. I think that you should place it in Russia, actually. For some reason the ...

Oh this sounds good! I can't wait for your first chapter to come out. I just noticed one thing: I said, kicking a leaf and hearing the noise of cement ...

1st period: Play a “get to know each other” game. 2nd period: Explain rules & expectations for future reference. 3rd period: Mr. Smith’s class has challenged us to play kickball ...

Slam! Kaylin woke with a start as a door slammed shut. We already know the door slammed shut, try using a different word. Then, without warning, he backhanded her…hard. If ...

You are very entertaining. Your train of thought is similar to mine. Anyways, so I feel kind of weird posting a reply on your journal entry. Hope you don't mind! ...

Wow, so I really like your style. Its fast paced and witty. I especially appreciated your opening statement. I coughed badly in the thick smoke and fell to the floor ...