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Re: Suburb
Hey:) I wanted to keep going onto the next piece, but as soon as I read the first four lines, it captured my attention:) This already means this is good.... ...
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Re: Softness of Doves
Hi:) Gosh, people notice your grammar mistakes before me again, so I don't want to repeat myself here. But, wow, Russian people are evil!!:D But true, I remember my great-grandmother ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: Softness of Doves
Hey:) So, I'm really excited about this, it definitely got me hooked:) You've chosen an interesting subject to write about - an NKVD camp, even though you should mention what ...
Jun 15, 2011 -
Re: terrorist?
Totally agree with you. I am so against stereotyping, it really annoys me when people do it. For example, I'm Russian, and as soon as people know it they start ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: --
I like it:) It's very original, and indeed I also think there's no life without love! I did find though, that the cupid decided to shoot the black arrow too ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: reincarnation
Hey, I really liked this:) Very deep stuff! The smile that lingers, the touch that tingles, the mouth that quivers cold and afraid. This is awesome, and a very vivid ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: I Can't Believe It
Omigosh, that is SO sweet! I loved it, it was so realistic, I actually felt my heart racing as I read it.. and exactly the same moment happened to a ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Emotion Wave
Hey:) I liked this, it's very hard to express emotions well, and I think you managed, even if this is a bit too short too, in my opinion. My only ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Take Me Darkness
Hey:) I like this - simple, but emotional. I see that you've already erased the forced rhyme, it became better now, though the last line with the nothingness is too ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: "Dead to Rights" Ch. 1
I like! Diary entries are interesting, and you've chosen a rich and mysterious period of history to choose from. This is very promising, and interesting to see into the mind ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: Looking in the Cushions
Hey:) OMG I love pirate stories:) And I actually really liked this, and liked the way you used the pirate-y language, it made it more believable. Shu' yer yap - ...
Jun 14, 2011 -
Re: The easy way chapter one
Hey:) Well, this evolved very fast, I think you could make the descriptions more detailed and vivid, it's too fast for me, especially because meeting the a guy whose father ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: To be God.
Hey:) Wow, this is so creepy. But GOOD. A couple of tips for you though: It was hard for me to follow what exactly you (or the writer of the ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Dancing with the devil
Wow:D Creepy, intense, but amazingly captivating. I did find when I read this out loud that the rhythm didn't quite flow nicely in the first two stanzas, but it got ...
Jun 9, 2011 -
Re: Bleu Celeste - Part 1
Hey Calli:D WOW this is so cool, I started reading and I could not get my eyes off this. Like, wow. All I have to say! I have never seen ...
Jun 9, 2011
