Emotion Wave
Anger.
Flaring up to engulf me. I’m falling, drowning in it, watching myself yell words I don’t want to. I can’t help it – it’s a human thing!
Uncontrollable, fiery, and painful. I feel good and bad as me and another tear at each others hearts. Will it ever end? Will I ever be able to dominate the un-controllable task of mastering it?
I really should learn how to meditate. Find a deeper calm inside myself and dive into it everyday. Distance myself from unruly feelings.
Yep, meditating might work.
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Hey:)
I liked this, it's very hard to express emotions well, and I think you managed, even if this is a bit too short too, in my opinion. My only criticism is that I didn't quite understand this line:
- I love this line. Just saying:)
Un-controllable is uncontrollable - little grammar mistake.
And, meditation is indeed a good thing! I meditate ... at least I try, sometimes:D It works if you know how to.
Keep up the good work! Do you do these for all emotions that come to you?
Polly
Really interesting but I thought it was too short. :/
You described anger really well. All of the mistakes are already pointed out. Over all, it's really cool. I love how you made it sweet and simple and yet described it with enough words.
Short and concise. You've pretty much summed up the feeling you're describing. I would like, though, to see how this can become more complex. Develop it a little more into an ample story.
Interesting. Very good. Although too many sentence fragments. And really short. Nice unexpected ending. Yes, definitely too many sentence fragments. Oh well. Work on that. Sometimes it's ok. But now it's annoying. Moving on...
There should be an apostrophe on 'others' somewhere... but I don't remember where.
I believe the expression is, 'will it never end?'
Well, since it's so short that's all I've got for ya. Nice job.