piepiemann22

Dude, not bad, but a few thing. 1.) make it more clear as to where your paragraphes are. It was a little hard to get at first. A simple space ...

Where do I begin. Over all I like the idea, but it needs work on it is expressed. I see no picture nor point to the poem. Also, what you ...

I really like this poem. You seem to be really confertable when talking about such a subject which is good. Even so, everything needs some fixing. 1.) Though your emotion ...

Over all it was okay, just a few things. 1.) I find it confusing when you start out with it having the person you're talking about is being attacked and ...

I liked the poem, but there is always something to fix. That's see what we got here. 1.) I would add a little more depth to your poem like Snoink ...

I have a question, is learnt really a word. If so I should get out more. Over all I really liked this poem, wish i could do that, but I ...

I have to make this brief, but this is what i got. 1.) It was very short and you confided us to one place. That's not bad, just if you ...

The message you are trying to show is brilliant and you did an okay job. Still, like the others said, don't force the rhyme sceam. To me rhyming is difficult ...

Well, it was, okay. Not too much to fix, the poem itself just didn't work for me at all. 1.) Put some more punctuation in the poem to aid to ...

I know little about plays, but I do understand the art of it. 1.) You have a few typos, read through it and you'll see what I mean. 2.) Though ...

I personaly liked the books, though y'all make good points that i have to agree with. Still, don't forget the author was only 19 when he wrote Eragon, so don't ...

I get the feeling you and your mother got in a fight? Any way, it was an okay poem, but like Clau said, people will have trouble relating to this. ...

It was a bit short, but a good place to stop in my opinion. My major problem is we have no idea what the characters look like. It's good to ...

I t was pretty good, just a few things. 1.) you could add some punctuation to the piece. Sometimes it helps the reader with the flow. 2.) Is this a ...

Okay, I don't have much time so I'm not sure what other people have put so if I repeat I'm sorry. I like the poem, I really did, but just ...