pazey13

I really liked this! The way you started it was excellent. The way you ended it was amazing. :) Although, I think you should leave out the "Well," in the ...

Wow. This is breathtaking! :) I liked the use of imagery. It was so beautiful and the lines seemed to flow together perfectly! I really enjoyed this. Keep writing. I ...

This is REALLY good. I can only imagine all the twists and surprises that can be packed into the story. This was a really good read and I can't WAIT ...

This was really good and I liked the use of vocabulary! It was really descriptive and beautifully written. It sounds like something a depressed person would write. But if you ...

This is really good but I didn't really understand what was happening at the beginning. Were the two men laying upside down, letting the dog lick their faces? I was ...

At my old school, I used to have to recite a classical poem every year. This sounds like something that I would pick to recite! It sounds so professional and ...

Woah! That was really cool! I really like the interpretation of the thunderstorm-how it wasn't something to be feared. It was more of something to be in awe of. I'll ...

It's really good but like people have said before me, it's not much of a prologue. You should make the prologue more like the first chapter of the book. This ...