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Hi, Carlito, another group review, this one for chapters 14 to 16.2. As usual, it's a little messy. 14 Okay, about the fight, it was bound to happen and, of ...

Hi, Carlito. Sorry, I'm catching up (again) so here is a review for chapters 13.1 and 13.2. It's a bit messy because I wrote it as I read. But I'd ...

Hi again, BlueAfrica. Here goes for a group review on chapter 12.1, 12.2, 13.1 and 13.2. 12.1 Okay, first of all, I say Methodius should be sitting in the bed! ...

Hi, BlueAfrica. It's been a while but I'm catching up. Those chapters were perfect. I like that you don't sacrifice your supporting characters simply to focus on your hero. They ...

Hi, BlueAfrica. I read all the chapters before, of course, but I didn't leave a review because I was too impatient. I like Edna and Benjamin, although I can't help ...

Hi, MJenks. First of all, I'm really sorry you have so many bad things to remember. I'm also sorry you had to lose your father and your grandfather. Having lost ...

Hi, Lightsong. Am I completely off or is your main protagonist, Gael, a boy? Because I thought so and, then, the other reviews made me wonder if I had missed ...

Hi, Carlito. I read all the chapters you have already published but I didn't post other reviews because I don't have all that much to say. It's that good. I ...

Hi, Stella. I loved this story. There wasn't much happening but it was just enough. Perfect. You make small mistakes here and there, especially when it comes to punctuation : « Every ...

Hi, Mavis. This was just hilarious. I'm really sorry that you have romantic problems but, at least, that's very entertaining for your readers. Your grandmother seems so sweet! I'm starting ...

Hi, Stormcloud. This was very good. The only small mistake I saw was this: « “Are you sure,” he asked.” You don’t look like you should be making decisions right now.” » ...

Hi, KaraStevens. Someone else wrote it and I agree, the story had potential but you need to work some more on it. My first issue was with grammar, and especially ...

Hi. It was, as predicted, very nice. Edna is just so cool and her POV on old age is completely believable. Hell, I'm 25 and I'm already terrified of one ...

Hi, Lightsong. How argument between petty, quarrelsome gods. Ilal sounds just like the bored dragon in G.A. Aiken's « Dragon Actually ». I liked it very much, though I don't understand very ...

Hi. It was a good story. The plot is interesting and the main protagonist sounds like there might be a lot to tell about him. I only noticed some inconsistencies ...