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Re: The Artist
Ooooh! I like the last line! Reminds me of Macbeth, with the "Out damn spot!" bit. Love it! Heheheh... Sorry about that. I like Shakespeare. :P Soooo I'm not really ...
Jun 6, 2010 -
Re: Removed
Hello grigoris! Welcome to YWS! My comments in green. Grammar mistakes in bold. "I had to do it... I had no other option ," said J essu while walking in ...
Jun 5, 2010 -
Re: Dawn & Dusk Ch. 1
That was... strange. Sorry, I don't exactly understand what's going on in this story... Maybe if it were longer, or I knew some background to it that would help. Or ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: .
comments in green A lonesome balloon floated down steadily in the dark of night. Its bright yellow exterior glowing brightly you already mentioned the balloon was bright against the dreary, ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: A last dance in darkness
Hello, BlanchKe. I'm papersolstice. Nice to meet you. Hmmm... An interesting story. I would agree with Mr.Knightley that this doesn't really belong in Fantasy, but I trust that it will ...
Jun 3, 2010 -
Re: When the Dragons flew.
comment are in bold When the dragons flew, this country had a heart. She was never led astray and always did what was right for herself and her people, for ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Vampyre
Awesome! I'm sick of seeing stupid fantasies about romantic and oh-so-selfless vampires! I love you for this! *ahem* Anyway. I couldn't help thinking that the narrating character was a woman. ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: Lies Like Roses and Thorns
Hello! Interesting story! This was one that I didn't feel the need to skip over! I'm glad you didn't mention anything unnecessary in your story, that's one thing. A few ...
Jun 1, 2010 -
Re: The Lost Stranger
Hey newb who is not as much as a noob as me but is still a newb! I'm BOB! But not really... So first of, I have seen SO many ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: "Escape from Loredaen Hall" Prologue: Poisoned
Hey, this is amazing! So, here's the deal. I hate Maurice, but I hate her in a good way. She seems slightly... off her rocker. A bit paranoid and/or crazy. ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: The Nobodies
Hello, fellow newb! Your story is very fast paced. I like that! Something, however, reminds me of playing the introduction quests of an Undead in World of Warcraft... *waves hand ...
Apr 9, 2010 -
Re: The Elemental Quest - The Immortal Seven (Chp 1 & 2)
Hello friend! Good to see another newb like me! Just to agree with the two good chaps above me, I like your J.R.R Tolkien approach to telling a myth, but... ...
Apr 9, 2010