paintingtherain97

This was vivid to the point of being frightening. I like the way that there are two different stories going on,but there should be a little more connection with the ...

This is moving. It shows how every sentence a person utters can shape another person's reality. One person talking about another can move people to do anything, even suicide. The ...

The first poem,I thought,was easy to relate to but didn't flow very well. Maybe you could break the first few lines in half so there aren't somany syllables. The second ...

Wow, I didn't realize I was reading porn.There were some run-ons and other grammatical things, but that's not that important. The thing is, sex and everything is okay in stories ...

This essay is relatable and well-put. I'm hoping to end up an author, but I've wondered for hours and hours about these things before. Whether or not you want to ...

This is accurate and good but kind of dry. I realize economics are dry and difficult to make exciting, but maybe you could try tospice it up using business metaphors. ...

I thought that this was really pure and full of emotion. I know I sound like a jerk to say it, but the tenses were slightly inconsistent. As for the ...