paddyackles

I actually like your ryhming scheme here, though it does seem a bit experimental. Think about it, orange ryhmes with no other one word. It kind of sounds like hinge, ...

Yay! This reminds me of a classic script. The people you really think are crazy are really the ones who are right. Reminds me of great works, like "A Wrinkle ...

I'd have to agree with most everyone here. It's a little bit too short to give a good critique, but if you keep working on it, there will be a ...

Well, I'm late in commenting, but I relate to this play so much, so I have to comment somehow. You basically touched every feeling we bipolar and hormonal teens face ...

Honestly, the way you described the situation is amazing. It's unbelievably passionate with sadness and I can even feel the strong sense of anger and frustration with in the words. ...

I'd have to agree with the first two. I do believe that there were some weak points in the poem where it was cliche, but what I've learned is that ...