p0lishtheworld

In the beginning, the description of her house and herself were really good. I did notice a lot of comma errors and such, but I'm pretty sure that's what all ...

Good job on the prologue. It's a good length and keeps just enough basically now we all HAVE to read more to get all these questions answered! I'm confused though, ...

I liked your poem, too. I'm not much for poetry, but all the random thoughts that somehow were sewn together to make sense was really interesting. The ending part was ...

Be careful about switching your tenses and stuff. A couple paragraphs toward the end, you started saying stuff in present tense and then switching to past. Yep, so not much ...

First off, thanks for reading my story! It really made my day..er..night. Mr. Born raised an eyebrow. “Very funny, Mr. Dille. Oookay, you may begin.” Mr. Dille! And they call ...

I'm a sucker for a good vampire story! One thing I don't think anybody else pointed out was how she got out of the bed all sweaty, but then when ...

Oh, I love love loved it! Sorry I can't really give any good literary critique because I was kind of 'in the moment' while reading it. It was so PERFECT!! ...

I really like the first-person POV you changed it to. It makes April feel really natural. Through the whole thing I kept thinking about how I read some books last ...

I liked your story. For some reason in the beginning (before the dialoge with Kar) I kept picturing everyone as Japaneese. I don't know why, though. That's sort of weird. ...