orlamurphy01

Thanks for the advice. I agree with most of what you said and I know my punctuation can be terrible I'll try and work on that. Cheers this was very ...

Thanks for the constructive criticism. I see what you mean but I was trying to build the tension before the action begins. I am kind of new to writing so ...

thank you for the helpful advice. I understand what your saying and I will defiantly take this into account when I write the next instalment. Thanks again