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Your words mostly flow well, but, if you are writing for publication and not yourself, you should watch some of the cliches like "light at the end of the tunnel." ...

This is a very good article. I used to do metaphysical stuff myself but then I started doing other things and those things took up the extra time. I would ...

Wow, this is awesome. I really can't think of anything that needs fixing. I've been going around and trying to repay everyone that has critiqued my work but this was ...

This is a good poem. You use repetition well (I have trouble with that sometimes as you've already seen) and you are able to use the structure of your poem ...

This is a really good story. The part about the drug called Paranoia is pretty good too. The only thing I would suggest is, since your are setting this in ...

As has already been said before, you should have paragraphs. Other that that, however, I think you should try to organize your thoughts better. Perhaps go into a bit more ...

THis is a pretty good beginning. Explaining things more a bit here would be good, but I think it would be really cool if you sort of explained things as ...

This was pretty good. I expected something really dark and depressing (you know, the garden variety sad poem). You did a really good job of staying away from that though. ...

Unless there is a reason you're not using any punctuation marks, I suggest you use those in order to show certain ideas. I couldn't get a feel for the rhythm; ...

This is a pretty good prologue. It draws the reader in and everything but there are times in this prologue where you are telling rather than showing. Like when the ...

This is a good starting point for a story. The only thing I would recommend would be to check your spelling (I especially noticed the spelling of "later" as "latter") ...

This is a good poem. I would, however, change the line that relates to the out of sight saying though because as I was reading I felt how original this ...

Wow, this is a nice poem. Other than getting rid of the conjunctions that other people suggested that you do I have nothing really to say about it. It's deep ...

Rather than turning this into a comedy I think you should turn her into a character who is trying to con the people she has been working with for some ...

This is a really good story but I think that you should try to get into the point of view of the new girl more so that we can sympathize. ...