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Wow, I'm really loving this story! It's only the third chapter and you've got me hooked! Can't wait to read the rest! I really only found one grammatical error: It ...

WOW, how dark, harsh, and lovely! You've really got something fantastic going there! A few little grammar comments, but otherwise I think it's marvelous :D It’s hard to say how ...

me it seems like you went only halfway there. There is some good imagery in this poem (again, the seeing straight through her to her black heart bit) but if ...

Basically what everyone is saying is true. Basing an entire poem on one single image like this is tricky: on the one hand, this kind of poem can be quite ...

^ I agree, why if they wanted to kill someone would they put them randomly in a horse? Some other parts of your story were a bit inconsistent. One question ...