olivia1987uk

I have to say I'm not keen on some of the ways you've phrased certain things. It seems, in your bid to be colloquial, you've lost some sincerity and the ...

I'm a bit behind the times here as I've been away because it was my 21st birthday! Woo! Happy birthday me! You've hd some excellent reviews. Very thorough and concise ...

Hey sezpez...I've only read the first paragraph...I'm going to reand and review bit by bit so bear with me if I sound confused...itll all become clear in the end hopefully...I ...

Hi! As you're new I just want to say welcome to YWS! We do have a few rules here, and it would be great if you can keep your review ...

The first three lines got me hooked straight away...the fact you can do that shows what a good piece this could be...really hope you will be carrying on with this! ...

Hey! Here's my review! The bitch was about to get what she deserved. His cold, and clammy hands reached towards her. Quickly, she stepped to the side. Tentatively asking, “What’s ...

It's very intriguing...yet maybe I need more of it to be able to judge sufficiently! The only thing I could possibly say is that I have read numerous pieces of ...

Hey! As far as I'm concerned, this just piece just keeps getting better and better! Although, the chapters are rather short....Have you considered contacting some agents about this? I'd seriously ...

Hi Ashley...sorry it's taken me so long to get here but at least I'm here now! I have at my side a glass of milk and a bar of fruit ...

I'm keen on this piece but I am still a little troubled about her name being make it more believeable you need to seriously add to the bit about her ...

From what I can gather your character has problems and because it is a letter and not direct prose there is no point commenting on grammar and stuff. I love ...

I really did like this piece and spotted no miatakes....there were a couple of occasions where you could have sused a semicolon as opposed to a comma but in the ...

Quick quick quick! I have to get this done before The X Factor starts....very excited! Lol! I have fifteen mins for this review so hope I do it justice...if not ...

At last! Some romantic fiction for me to critique! I've been waiting for something new for a while now so thanks for posting! Since you're new, I'd just like to ...

Hey Andrew, your biggest fan is here again... Although I think this is beautifully written like the rest of your pieces, I don't quite think it has the same emotive ...