octocoffee

Wow, what a lovely piece. I think your introduction is so strong and vibrant, I was hooked in immediately. The haiku was an excellent wasy to end it as well. ...

Hey! I've got quite a bit to say, so I hope I don't bore you with my prodding. So let's go! It's a very simple poem. I feel like it ...

The night closed down on us, I feel like the comma is unnecessary. as I felt his cool breath down my neck. It was an exhilarating feeling, Again, unnecessary comma. ...

Hey Ray! I'm octocoffee, and I thought I'd say a little something about your poem. So I'll start with the nitpicking, because I really can't leave any piece without nitpicking. ...

Hey, will this be published soon? If so, congratulations! There are a few things I'm a bit curious about though. In terms of writing style, I'm really glad that you ...

Hey, nice to see that you made some changes to the poem! First of all, I do like that you extended the poem, it sounds great now. I'm glad that ...

Wow, this was great, absolutely fantastic. I'm octocoffee by the way, nice to meet you. But as mentioned, spelling and grammar were impeccable. I'm terribly jealous of your skills. The ...

Hey Kaitelyn! I'm octocoffee, nice to meet you. You've written an interesting beginning to a story, so I thought I might show my interest by reviewing. I tend to get ...

I will definitely agree with Bickazer and Master_Yoda. Speaker of the Dead is wonderful, clearly better than Ender's Game. Ender's Game certainly feels like a set-up, and the two should ...

Hey there! You wrote a lovely piece, I found it very true and made me think about myself for a bit. Ironically, I'm going to point out 'flaws' in this ...

Hey Megan! I'm octocoffee, nice to meet you. So, I thought it was a very cute and sweet poem. However, I have a few things I'd like to point out. ...

Hey mechi! Welcome to the forum; I'm new as well :D Anyway, let's get started, shall we? First of all, is the title really "Another Teen Pregnancy Story"? Just a ...

Hey! Nice job, it's very sweet. There's just a few things I have to say. First of all, I think as long as you stick with one, consistent format throughout ...

Yay! I adore Greek myths; that's a really great prompt. You did a great job with this. Pasiphae is definitely a neglected character and it's great you chose to broaden ...

I hope you don't mind that I'm reviewing this a month after it was put up. I'm new, so... I adore this, I really do. This is coming from someone ...