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wow thats soooo good i think i'll go play it give me the link (if there is no downloaing involved :P )

well, yes but it could have been put differently. it was intersting, and there was a discrepency thing you were talking about now that i think about it but not ...

you could almost feel the wound(not that i know what that feels like, but i've split my knee an inch deep)...(ow...)....anyway, the title helps the reader(well at least me) and ...

quite the interestingness....short but explanatory :) !

well they got money to buy an apartment, usually middleclass people live in apartments in big cities (like NY). and well, I explained that history of the plasmasword in the ...

i'm not sure if i'm interpereting this right but it sounds really sad. you should make a 'part two' :smt023 lol

huh? what happened? is it over? :smt101

wow i didn't think so many people would care about my one poem :) thank you all! your critiques are helpful, for the most part. maybe i'll start paying more ...

a purple heart is an award that an american gets if he is wounded on the battlefield :) sorry for the confusion; i forgot that you guys from the UK ...

thats pretty funny..weird, but funny

wow thats okay. this reminded me: a long time ago, i wrote a poem, and i think it got into the newspaper. i think i'll post it :D

its the first poetry on yws i've read and it looks good. jared told me bout you; said you wrote good stuff. i agree a little about what he wrote ...

yes, she's my sis... :backtotopic: but I don't try to rush to the 'good stuff' really. this chapter and the next are just setting up the story. its mucho more ...

just wanna say part 3 is longer and taking thought so sorry. thanks to all who posted! 8) oh tim quit that licky thing thats a weird smilie... ~gotta work ...

:D i agree with everyone else. this book your stories are the definition of the words character developement. cant wait to read more.... great job!