nickelodeon

I liked it. Especially the line: "countless years of erosion took place in two seconds." I'm not sure why i like it. I just do. It's pretty good as is. ...

Original idea. I love her name. You say everything very bluntly. Maybe you could try to show what's going on better. Ease the reader into whatever's going on. It had ...

That was good. I like the idea a lot. I would not capitalize 'one thick skin." I think your point is made even if its lower case. You have a ...

Good Story. It flowed really well. (I can't stand stories that you have to re-read eight trillion times to make sense of them!) I agree that you overdid the accent. ...

Wow. That was confusing. I think you have a good idea going, but it is very hard to understand. That stated, I don't think i'd be the best person to ...

I'll be honest, It was kind of strange. I really liked the description a lot. I wish I could write like that! As a story goes, or even a short ...

Well... I haven't figured out how to quote stuff yet, so you'll just have to read it my confusing way. First... "as a member of the Platnium Sun" I think ...

"But it was better than the standard gray tabletops this piece of junk for a starship fancied, so she said nothing" this piece of junk for a starship. That's confusing. ...

Wow, I really like the ending. A little more description of the spaceship setting would be nice. Actually, a little more description of the characters would be nice too. In ...

"I sharpened my ears as I punched the card given by the grumpy voice on the machine." I'm pretty sure i understand what you mean, but look this line over ...

It's an awesome idea, and I like the relation between the tree and security. As i read it, though, i kept thinking that I can't imagine this happening in real ...