nativecatcher

Thanks for reading! I do intend to actually finish this novel. The story is actually non-linear and revolves around 5 main characters (Deck is one of them) the first three ...

Thanks for following my story I really appreciate it! I'll change those errors too!

Thanks for reading! And I when I was writing the last line I was thinking a lot about that and I wasn't sure if I should try to break it ...

Just make sure that they have clear motives throughout the story. If you ever decide to give more information about the backstory make sure that you can really imagine the ...

Thanks for looking over my piece! I get your point. I'm going to do a lot of research and edit all of my pieces. Thanks again for reviewing. Would you ...

Thanks for the review! I will actually move the part about the personality ddisorder. It's a great idea! Also I've been researching it a lot more so in the upcoming ...

Thanks for keeping up with my story! Rozalin is deaf but she wears hearing aids a lot of the time. Do you think I need to include this point in ...

Thanks for the review! I see what you mean. I do plan on making revisions so if you want you can see what I changed!

Thanks! I get what you're saying too with making it flow better. I will work on that and thanks for reading!

Well I must say I did enjoy this a lot. To be honest when I first started reading it I thought hmm... another one of those stories. Surprisingly though I ...

Thank you all for your critiques and comments I will work on it and post the edited version.Again thanks alot.

1 6:03 am Interesting how you got all these differant characters. I guess I should get started reading your actual story. Hmm I think you should*wink*

Thank you so much!!!This had made me happy!!

I really liked this, it was simple maybe a bit cheesy but none the less sweet. I think you have a great writing talent.

Thank you all for help I will revise this!