mystogan

I really like this poem. It certainly reflects the many aspects of humanity that is apparent in modern society. Lines 2 and 6 were a bit awkward. I found that ...

This is a strange poem but a fun one. It has a very unique feel to it. This is probably because I am used to reading poems about some historical ...

This is a long read so I am going to comment on different chunks separately saying what’s good, bad and what to improve in one go. 1) The start is ...

This seems interesting enough but it was confusing at the start, when he or she talks to themselves. It would be good if there were speech marks or it is ...

I agree that this is raw, it needs proof reading. Some the sentences don't make sense. I think some more character development is required. For example, the main character runs ...

Before I get into the nice parts, there was something not quite right here. For some reason I didn't feel the flow of the words so I found myself having ...

Originally I thought this was turning out to be a poem, thank goodness it didn't because as I was reading I thought "how good would this be as a story". ...

Ha ha, this is very funny. If only it was possible for me. I have exams right now. I even had one yesterday. I ended up doing the opposite of ...

Your story has taken off in two directions it seems. I was expecting the typical rescue scene but then you threw in this invisibility as well to make matters worse. ...

This seems like two stories fused together. There is this typical story of a young boy in a normal city with a troubled life which goes side by side with ...

It was very emotive without being overdone. I like how I was made to care for random people who died only too soon, like the well-dressed man, karla, and the ...

hey sorry for the LATE review, i have been uber busy applying for medicine, i will continue to be busy for a while but anyway here goes... This poem is ...

A world without science sure seems scary. I mean i get it especially since i am so science oritentated. Then again i think it is very narrow-minded to assume that ...

haha, this just sounds so funny. I know that was not the desired effect but hey i can't help it. throughout this whole chapter there is this guy who just ...

I like this ending. The forever eerie mood is present once again. It is not so much that the plot moves forward in a flowing fashion but it seems very ...