Heyyy! This is really, really fun and interesting! I like how you worded it, I liked the terms you used, and found that the flow was good. I would suggest you use stanzas though, but because they make the poem a bit easier to read, but that's just my opinion.
So the first part was really good, but for the first line I would suggest a slight change to:
"Are exams stressing every never in you?"
I think that would work better because of the position of nerves (inside a person) and just how it sounds. Secondly I would suggest "then let me give you a recipe"
But I understand that you are trying to rhyme, so I get why you would want it to end with you. Here's a way it can still rhyme:
"Then, here is a recipe for you!"
I liked the "really" part (normally the really should be in italics but I took a peek below and saw that you were 11 when you wrote that, how cute!) And what a long word! One would surely need concentration for that one.
My final suggestion would be to change the ending from so a very good luck, to
And during the exam don't get stuck,
that's all, good luck!
Something like that.
Overall though this was a fun, silly, cute read that I enjoyed reading!
Also, I will keep a look out for some of your other works! (I am reading Love Never Changes)
--Dream onnnnnnn!
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