myruin

I rather like your poem. =) It makes me think, and that's what writing should do for the reader, make them think. As far as a review, I didn't see ...

Wow. Creepy... really gave me the shivers for a second. Now, to the review! 1) I would make your characters a little more... individual. They all seem to bled together ...

These two lines bug me a little, because of their length: What a cute couple we would make, they say, how in love we seem. Our innocent giggles sound to ...

I really liked this, and think it has the potential to be a really epic (my favorite word) poem. It could use more substance, more poetic devices, some punctuation, but ...

Nice :D . I like the first two lines a lot. I can really relate. You say fear quite a bit... maybe a little more than you really need to. ...

Hi! I really liked reading your poem. Like the others said, you lose a little with the last line being so long. Also, you might want to use some stronger ...