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Thanks everyone for you input. It means a lot. I went back through and edited the 2nd, 3rd, and 4th stanzas. I hope it is to everyone's liking.

Thanks! =] I went back and edited the sonnet based off of your comment. I kinda wanted to show the voice killing the woman he loves. (Morbid, I know.)

I went through and made some changes. I think I covered everything everyone mentioned. If not, just restate it again and I will fix it! Thanks everyone for your help. ...

I liked it for a beginning. I just had a few questions about it. What did you write this for? and... Do you plan on making an act II?

I can't believe I didn't think about that. Thank you for telling me to remove it. I will definitely do that. And I wrote this piece for my AP Language ...

No, seriously. If someone didn't find this funny I have lost faith in mankind. Gerald Greenwizer, the recently appointed chief editor at the New York Times agreed. “In this day ...

Thanks everyone for critiquing this. This is my first ever shot at writing a screenplay, so I appreciate all of the input and will add it all into the screenplay. ...

Okay, sounds great! I will definitely do that. Thanks for all the crit help. =D