moookau

Good job. I like the biting, cynical feel the poem portrayed to me, and the vivid images that it described. But it seems just a bit too angry or angst-filled ...

I love this poem! The choice of most of the words clearly conveys the sensuality. Except for the phrase "Made In..." I think that it breaks the flow, and when ...

I really like this one! But I don't quite understand why "his phone lies crushed"... his cell phone? He was trying to call for help? I'm not sure why it ...