miyaviloves

I agree very much with Clua and OMG, i did really enjoy this poem. But I also agree with Clau that I couldn't really find it's meaning, if it has ...

I thought that was a really cute poem, but i would have to agree with Mad on some of his suggestions. I like your vocabulary range, you use words so ...

I'm so gald that she is talking to Tom, I think that she needs him! Another great part here Alainna! Uh-hum!” That was a man in a suit that was ...

I disagree with Ofour, I didn't think it sounded awkward atall, I liked this piece in all honesty. Call me stupid but I didn't notice the I guess it didn't ...

oooh I really liked this! Very mature, and good sense of your characters and such! Ok, so I was a little confused, but as you said it was a little ...

I enjoyed reading this, althought the second line was kind of expected - looking in :P Over all i thin kyour structure and flow was good, and you kept it ...

Yay part three! Thanks for messaging me about it :P Rolling out of bed and he hit the giant ‘off’ button on top of the alarm clock. - this sentence ...

Aww they seem to be developing a lovely friendship! (Or maybe Jon wants more hehe) I really like where you are tkaing thism you're writing is very well developed and ...

hello :) I know Alainna pointed out some stuff but i thought I might as well too as I go :) police was, Fun. Is there any reason why fun ...

i agree with most of what Clau said on this, but I will crit it all anyway :) He raise himself to the top Should raise be raised here? These ...

Broken Wings pretty much pointed out all that need to be here. And Pretty in Pink did not say much atall lol. Anyway, I really enjoyed reading this, you have ...

I agree with it being a pretty poem, it was very cute sweet and well nice :) I like poems like this, itrs refreashing after reading so many teen angst ...

I have to agree with Write Me on this. I think you were just rambling on in this poem, it does not mean anything, and the thing about the stew? ...

i liked this piece too, your character development is coming along nicely. I too got a little confused, i think its the unusual charcter names and the large amount of ...

Incan, this was superbbbbbbb writing! (I always have such high praise for your stuff hehe). I liked that this was taken from a perspective (is that the right word) of ...